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#1 :: December 4th, 2011 @ 4:46 PM

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I'm writing up the story for Reekashaka. I suggest you read the whole thing to get the gist what I'm asking for.

Story so far LONG AS HELL

I'm stumped at what to do for the next part. I have four scenarios of what happens, but in all four, Reekashaka loses her leg, climbs up a tree to escape and her brother (unnamed as he is a minor character) keeps the bear away from her. She will survive in all of the scenarios.

Here are the four scenarios:
1) Brother lives.

2) Brother is wounded (severity not decided), but lives.

3) Brother dies, Reekashaka blames herself for his death.

4) Brother dies, bear goes to her homeland and kills everyone. Hours later, Reekashaka comes down from tree, limps home and finds everyone dead, the bear gone. Reekashaka never forgives herself and gains a fear of bears.

Which scenario is better?

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#2 :: December 4th, 2011 @ 5:28 PM

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Well....I'm a sucker for happy endings.
HOWEVER. The bitter taste of the latter 3-4 scenario's are interesting.
I'd suggest the last two if you want to have the character struggle with herself.
OR- for a more happy-ish....
Perhaps a combination.
#2- badly wounded- bear loses interest. AND 4- bear continues on and kill perhaps a lot of villagers (could a bear kill a whole village)
so she has the guilt but it's not incapacitating.
Honestly it doesn't seem like there is a bad one- they all are interesting, and it largely depends what you want the final product (her character) to be.
hope that helps.
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#3 :: December 4th, 2011 @ 6:10 PM

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I would enjoy the bitter ending as well, but I would think it'd be nice for her brother to survive.

I think I forgot that, this is a tiny village and a rabid animal will kill and spread the disease.

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#4 :: December 4th, 2011 @ 6:14 PM

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It would provide the brother to be a more important role in her life- him living (a duh....)

ah. RABID bear.
Perhaps they are away from the village for as much as a week (trying to survive) they make it back, the disease has taken its toll.

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#5 :: December 5th, 2011 @ 3:48 AM

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@TIRION

Now why didn't I think of that scenario?

I had forgotten about that bit of rabies. Hmm, yes, it makes sense. Brother wounded, Reekashaka, living in a village where disease is unknown, does the mistake of bringing him back. It takes a week to find home, they get there and disease takes it toll. Maybe have Bro kill a few of the non hunting villagers, he gets killed as they think he's mad. Reekashaka is blamed for bringing a madman and exiled.

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