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#1 :: April 30th, 2012 @ 10:56 PM

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Everyone knows the story of Cinderella and its happy ending. Your task is to write an alternative ending where Cindy's tale doesn't end with that stereotypical fairytale ending. (by )

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#2 :: April 30th, 2012 @ 11:15 PM

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Are we all being lazy, just sitting around, waiting for the first person to respond? Well I've been bouncing on my toes, unable to contain my excitement for this amazing thread! So much so that my health has been questionable... If I send a photo, would you guys tell me if my face looks round and sickly? Ah well... Maybe I should just hit the hay and wait for some more amazing people to post. (Am I being superfluous by using a word twice?!) Well, it is a broad word...

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#3 :: May 1st, 2012 @ 2:42 AM

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The old man pulled the tattered photo album out from the very top of the bookshelf. His thick, gnarled fingers shook as he flipped the cover open while taking a seat in his favorite antique recliner. The album had been placed strategically upon his bookshelf -- he liked to fool himself, tell himself that if the album was out of sight, it meant that it was out of mind. But he would never forget; he would never lose the memories of those amazing days by the lake, where he had met her for the first time. He would always cherish those days spent out by the shore, skipping rocks across the broad, tranquil waters on lazy days, sitting around a bonfire, where he would use the cold nights as an excuse to wrap his arm around her shoulders, or simply taking a walk together under the boughs of the cottonwood trees.

But she was gone now, and his memories were all he had left. The photos were the only tangible proof that she had ever been a part of his life; it was the only proof he had that their love wasn't simply superfluous, that they had once meant more to each other than everyone else in the world combined.

He missed her deeply.

heyyy look it's a depressing love story. I've been reading too much Jodi Picoult lately.

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#4 :: May 1st, 2012 @ 11:04 AM

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The photo of Jordan's "sister" looked questionable in every way possible. The impression it gave totally failed my expectations. She was sitting on a bench with an lazy expression. She wore superfluous accesories and had her hair down. Her figure was round and her face looked both sickly and sleepy.

"Are you sure this is your sister?" I asked Jordan. He only laughed in response.

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#5 :: May 1st, 2012 @ 12:43 PM

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Haha! That made me smile (: Great way to start it off!

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Oh man. That made me miss so many people - as a photographer it's hard to look back at old pictures and not get all emotional, especially since a few of the people in the majority of my photos have passed on (too early in their lives, as well).

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That was great! It totally brought the picture to my mind. For some reason she was wearing a red sweater XD idk. The "failed expectations" part really made the story more interesting, even in it's short length. Great job!

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#6 :: May 1st, 2012 @ 1:57 PM

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Hmm... A bit more depressing than I wanted, but I've written it now xD

Juliet, the dice were loaded from the start,

And I bet, and you exploded in my heart,

And I forget, I forget, the movie song,

When you gonna realise that it was just that the time was wrong,

Juliet?

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#7 :: May 1st, 2012 @ 3:39 PM

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The mission he was assigned was questionable; the information he was given was rather vague. It wasn't an easy job he pursued, protecting humanity. It was a job that kept him on his toes, he could never be lazy about it.

An old photo presented itself among the broad lot; his first clue. It was a picture of a young, sickly girl, sitting in an antique rocking chair, bound by a set of old, braided ropes. This was clearly the girl he would be rescuing.

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#8 :: May 1st, 2012 @ 5:55 PM

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@ I like it, it's an interesting take on the "looking at a photograph" idea

Juliet, the dice were loaded from the start,

And I bet, and you exploded in my heart,

And I forget, I forget, the movie song,

When you gonna realise that it was just that the time was wrong,

Juliet?

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#9 :: May 1st, 2012 @ 7:22 PM

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Thanks.

I like yours, too. It's definitely very sad, but it really touches the heart.

#10 :: May 1st, 2012 @ 7:24 PM

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I think I'm really going to enjoy doing this and reading other people's things!

Juliet, the dice were loaded from the start,

And I bet, and you exploded in my heart,

And I forget, I forget, the movie song,

When you gonna realise that it was just that the time was wrong,

Juliet?

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#11 :: May 1st, 2012 @ 7:32 PM

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I agree. I'm already enjoying this.

#12 :: May 1st, 2012 @ 9:52 PM

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Thank you! I should've improved the description. But yay, I had sweaters in my mind too. XD

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Great job! It's sad but beautiful.

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I like the way you write. Awesome.

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#13 :: May 1st, 2012 @ 10:26 PM

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Thank you!!

Yours was fun to read as well~

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Glad I could make you smile.

I quite enjoyed posting first!

I love this idea though - it's simply amazing how many different paths we take a simple list of words. I've really loved everyone's posts so far!!

#14 :: May 2nd, 2012 @ 12:21 AM

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"Remember me..."

WOO VIOLENCE

She stared solemnly at the reflection her bare toes cast against the cold, tile floor as she once again drifted off into deep thought. Five years she had spent locked up in the penitentiary. Five years she had endured punishment for a crime she had no hand in committing. Five years she had spent in a state of gradual deterioration. Oh yes, she was well aware of her impending death. She could no longer face a mirror, as the very sight disturbed her. The sickly, skeletal formation staring back at her was no longer reminiscent of her once beautiful, round visage. Of course, the institution cared nothing for her health. She was just a number amongst thousands of murderers and thieves and her death would mean one less mouth to feed.

Her breath rattled in her chest as she was suddenly shoved roughly from behind. “Move it,” the guard growled, urging her further towards the infirmary. Her cracked lips parted in a weak smile and she began to stumble at a lazy, apathetic pace, hoping to piss him off even more. What did it matter? What did anything matter, anymore? The nurse would only confirm her suspicions: You don’t have much longer to live. Might as well make of best of what time she had left.

The guard closed the door behind her, trapping her in a room of pure, sterile white. The nurse took her arm and led her to an examination table, where she began a routine check in an indifferent manner. At one point, the nurse had the audacity to ram a syringe into her arm to draw a blood sample. You loveing dog.

As the nurse turned to take notes on her clipboard, her patient began to wriggle silently. While still maintaining a sitting position, she managed to work her handcuffed arms underneath her. Unfortunately for the nurse, she did not realize the figure quietly creeping upon her until she felt something sharp pierce her skull.

The patient’s handcuffs clanked loudly as she continued to use the syringe a superfluous number of times, just for the sheer hell of it. An amazing, invigorating sensation overcame her as the needle hit flesh over and over. Even as the woman collapsed to the floor and her blood oozed onto the tile, she continued her merciless barrage. Only when the guard’s rough hands gripped her shoulders did she stop.

Now she had a reason for being in prison. Too bad she wouldn’t live to see the punishment.

UGH. It's been too long since I've written. ;^;

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I freaking love this idea. I've been looking for something like this for a while~

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This made me laugh. xD Very clever use of the words!

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Ahh, the gift of memories...This made me want to smile and cry simultaneously, if that even makes sense...I don't know what I'd do if I lost my significant other...;^;

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OMG, the "failed expectations" part. xD Either that was a really bad photo, or that girl should get acquainted with a paper bag. (justkiddingbutnotreally)

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I love how many details you included in your story! It's very realistic and I enjoy the conflicting images of the daughter and the tourist. But I was seriously about to cry at one point. :'c

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I want to see more of this mysterious, super hero-like man. >:c

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#15 :: May 2nd, 2012 @ 12:48 AM

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It was interesting how you switched subjects in a way - from calling the subject "her" and "she" to, instead, "the patient." It really tensed the feeling of the story up suddenly!

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#16 :: May 2nd, 2012 @ 12:52 AM

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I was attempting to create a sense of distance between the reader and the patient during her act of violence; a mark showing that she was no longer worthy or capable of normal thought and that she transformed from an innocent human to a vicious animal/criminal. Or something along those lines. XD Yay for experimenting~ I'm glad it had an effect!

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#17 :: May 2nd, 2012 @ 1:03 AM

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It worked well (:

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#18 :: May 2nd, 2012 @ 2:53 AM

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Lol. Thank you!
I love how you described everything, and the action! It was so... intense. Amazing. ♥

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I love everything! I like how the image starts warm at the beginning, then it becomes cold and lifeless at the end. Very vivid and emotional.

BTW I would like to suggest that you put the number of the prompt so it's more fun. This would be the first!

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#19 :: May 2nd, 2012 @ 12:03 PM

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I'll do that! Although I think I'll be starting a new thread every week for as long as I can keep this going

And I'll probably link to the previous weeks' prompts in the new threads.

Wow, how lucky. You stumbled on a Raffle Ticket while making this post!

Obviously someone likes this idea! XD

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#20 :: May 2nd, 2012 @ 4:53 PM

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@ Thank you! I was going for a kind of distance; it's really interesting the things of which you think when faced with a situation like that, you know? I could totally imagine the narrator's mind going off on all sorts of tangents, and I kind of wanted to express that, but not explicitly.

@ Wow, I really enjoyed that, in a twisted sense. The psychosis I can imagine taking over her mind was really interesting; I love stories like that, ones that explore the psyche of the damaged. One day, I intend to write books like that, but not anywhere near now. Not sure I'll be good enough though, haha! Also, thank you

What gave you the impression it was a daughter?

@ I'm really glad you started this! As for the starting a new thread thing, I'm not sure that will be the most efficient ways of doing it; it could get difficult to organise the threads. Perhaps posting each new one in a spoiler tag in the top post and then pinging everyone in a new post with it as well, would be an easier and possibly more succinct way of doing it?

What kinda of prompts were you planning on producing, by the way? It would be interesting to see what people came up with when presented with pictures or the work of another as well as sets of words. Short quotes that need to be included could work, too. Was that the kind of thing you were thinking?

@ @ You both have incredible writing styles and skills, perhaps you'd be interested in something like this?

Juliet, the dice were loaded from the start,

And I bet, and you exploded in my heart,

And I forget, I forget, the movie song,

When you gonna realise that it was just that the time was wrong,

Juliet?

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#21 :: May 2nd, 2012 @ 6:15 PM

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let us toast to animal pleasures, to escapism,

to rain on the roof and instant coffee, to unemployment insurance and library cards,

@Synesthete Oh wow, thank you so much for pinging me here! This looks super awesome; it's the perfect inspiration for me to stop procrastinating and just start writing for some very neglected characters. I'll probably be consistent with setting and characters, but no guarantees on temporal linearity.

Actual writing will have to wait until after my exam tomorrow though. =.=;; I allotted a couple hours to roleplaying, and I think I've already gone over that... must study... nuuuuu. :c

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#22 :: May 2nd, 2012 @ 6:53 PM

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@ I'm glad you're interested, I had hoped it would be your sort of thing; I never get tired of reading your posts :p I can't wait to see your response, good luck with your exam!

Juliet, the dice were loaded from the start,

And I bet, and you exploded in my heart,

And I forget, I forget, the movie song,

When you gonna realise that it was just that the time was wrong,

Juliet?

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#23 :: May 2nd, 2012 @ 7:34 PM

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-gasp- x: I just realized there were no gender pronouns. But you actually did a good job keeping it gender neutral, so the narrator's sex changes with every reader. I guess I just saw some of myself in the character while s/he was in mourning and I automatically associated my gender with him/her. x: But keeping gender unimportant in the story really helps the reader connect and perhaps identify more with the story's emotions than if s/he was told the narrator's sex.

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#24 :: May 2nd, 2012 @ 11:53 PM

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Alright! I'm glad. And congratulations, lucky.

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Exactly! I know what you're talking about and you did it so well.
I can be explicit at times and it isn't healthy. XD

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#25 :: May 3rd, 2012 @ 12:36 AM

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I was definitely looking to include a variety of things - but if you have any suggestions or would like to suggest a prompt in entirety, please feel free to let me know (: I can only be creative some days XD As far as the spoiler tag and all that may work! And would probably keep the clutter out of the writing forums as well, which is something that I'm worried about.

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#26 :: May 3rd, 2012 @ 8:04 AM

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The scene left behind for the police seemed rather questionable. There was no furniture in this dismal, uninhabitable apartment. The only thing that could be seen in the room, besides the victim, had been the picture frames on the wall. All the framed photographs were crooked--some had even fallen off the wall and hit the floor with a smash--as they walked in with their crime scene tape. The photos ranged from portraits of the victim to scenes taken at the nearby lake and in the mountains to the north.

As for the victim herself, she was found sitting propped up against the wall with a look of terror on her face. She was stripped completely naked. Not a drop of blood or sign of a struggle was visible on her skin--not a hair out of place, or round bruises near her wrists (or anywhere else on her body). The only thing that seemed to be out of sorts for this woman was that her toes were a sickly yellow. It was not completely evident to the police if she had been a victim of a crime at all.

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#27 :: May 3rd, 2012 @ 8:23 AM

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Wow, your entry is so amazing! It got me creeped out because the picture was so clear. XD
Awesome.

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#28 :: May 3rd, 2012 @ 9:43 AM

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Sitting in the window sill on this sunny afternoon was a large marmalade cat, bright orange and beautiful like the subject of a professionally shot photo. It had been a perfectly lazy day, with the humans out of the house on one of their many errands. After indulging in a rather long nap, the cat had taken about grooming himself, and was now occupied with licking his toes. It was questionable just when the humans he shared his castle with would return, but he found he didn't care, so long as they returned before he became too hungry.

Uhm, meow? I must have cats on the brain today. I've barely had any sleep and I'm sick, but I didn't want to put off responding to this any longer. x)

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#29 :: May 3rd, 2012 @ 4:47 PM

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@ Hehe, that bit was actually unintentional :p I just didn't think it was necessary to specific if I'm writing in first person :p

@ It has to be done in a very good sort of way if the narrator's mind goes off on tangents. It often is a marmite effect thing; love or hate. Like in the Catcher in the Rye, where everyone either loves or hates that book...

@ If I think of any good ones, I will definitely smail them to you. I can't promise any, though ><

@ Oooh wow the mystery! I want to know the rest, how she died, etc... And why the yellow toes...

@ Mew mew mew, wasn't expecting it to focus on a cat :p

Juliet, the dice were loaded from the start,

And I bet, and you exploded in my heart,

And I forget, I forget, the movie song,

When you gonna realise that it was just that the time was wrong,

Juliet?

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#30 :: May 3rd, 2012 @ 8:27 PM

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@ Uwahhh, you're too nice. >3< But Ren is a lazy, bad panda who already forgets to check subeta all the time ... that, and as it turns out art uni *does* care if you get your portfolio in on time *sob*. Maybe I'll still be allowed to join if this goes on later.

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#31 :: May 3rd, 2012 @ 11:44 PM

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#32 :: May 4th, 2012 @ 8:03 AM

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Waaaah, I'm excited for the next prompt! Lol. Maybe I'll take another crack at this one later. In the mood to write.

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#33 :: May 4th, 2012 @ 8:10 AM

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let us toast to animal pleasures, to escapism,

to rain on the roof and instant coffee, to unemployment insurance and library cards,

I wrote more than I'd intended to. Got carried away with the time and setting; there are so many decisions to make, and this is one variation that I'm liking... but we'll see if it holds up. Sorry, rambling to self. /drabble

Friday, 5/4/2012

to absinthe and good-hearted landlords, music and warm bodies and contraceptives...

and to the “good life”, whatever it is and wherever it happens to be

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#34 :: May 4th, 2012 @ 1:47 PM

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@ Aww okay, I'm sure you'll definitely be welcome later. If you can't find the thread, I can ping you here again later.

Juliet, the dice were loaded from the start,

And I bet, and you exploded in my heart,

And I forget, I forget, the movie song,

When you gonna realise that it was just that the time was wrong,

Juliet?

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#35 :: May 4th, 2012 @ 3:11 PM

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I really liked it, nice work and word placement. It flowed greatly, and honestly, I was hoping to read more~ xD Good work.

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:] I love stuff involving difficult, unsolvable crimes~ Great work, I loved it.

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#36 :: May 4th, 2012 @ 6:11 PM

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@ I really like your use of the word "broad"!

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#37 :: May 5th, 2012 @ 5:22 PM

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With his hat pulled down over his eyes the figure crouched to examine the round lifeless body. It was almost amazing how this sort of thing no longer affected him, and a little scary too. His fingers fluttered at his sides as he examined his surroundings; he needed to move the body before the light of day. He slowly got to his feet and cricked his neck before grabbing the corpse by the arms and dragging it towards his wagon. He wasn’t gentle with the body by any means as it rolled over foliage and hit off of rocks – it was just a body after all, the soul had long ago left. As his wagon hitched forward he knew he should go back and fill in the grave but he was feeling rather lazy tonight and he still had a lot of work left to do before classes in the morning. Now, most people would find his hobby questionable at best, but someday they would thank him. This was in the name of science after all.

#38 :: May 6th, 2012 @ 2:23 AM

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sorry that it's so long. i was inspired by a dream someone told me that they'd recently had. i'm reading through everything and so far i love all the responses and how unique they are. everyone here has a way with words.

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#39 :: May 6th, 2012 @ 6:50 AM

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@ Wow that was incredible! I must admit, I'm surprised by the effectiveness of your use of second person; it really gets to the reader, puts them in the place of the character. I must know, who is "she", the girl who seizes?

Juliet, the dice were loaded from the start,

And I bet, and you exploded in my heart,

And I forget, I forget, the movie song,

When you gonna realise that it was just that the time was wrong,

Juliet?

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#40 :: May 6th, 2012 @ 8:26 AM

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Really good! I think this isnone of the times when second person really adds to the story. Great suspense!

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Reminds me of Frankenstien. Except he was more obsessed than lay about his work! hehe.

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I really like it! Your story has a strong voice to it and a lot of personality.

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