Pet Spotlight - emi101_101
emi101_101 has won the Pet Spotlight!
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Tokkida
Congratulations on the win, sweetie! Wonderful story :D
Thank you guys!
Came as a shock for sure!
and for the comments:
1. She wasn't actually done yet, I still was saving up to have a profile done for her.
2. I made the pet 4 and a half years ago, I just wanted to name the thing! D:
and 3. Sorry for grammer issues, I honestly don't major in English nor do I plan too :p
Came as a shock for sure!
and for the comments:
1. She wasn't actually done yet, I still was saving up to have a profile done for her.
2. I made the pet 4 and a half years ago, I just wanted to name the thing! D:
and 3. Sorry for grammer issues, I honestly don't major in English nor do I plan too :p
wow, the negative comments here annoyed me a lot. :|
congrats so much on the win!!! the pet is gorgeous and so is the story. you definitely have a writing talent!! c:
congrats so much on the win!!! the pet is gorgeous and so is the story. you definitely have a writing talent!! c:
I dont like that its a premade, but thats just my personal opinion. The story is quite nice though
Though the story is great, I feel as if it has a lot of mechanical issues.
The English could use some work and a lot of sentences have problems with the tenses, specifically with 'have', 'has', and 'had'. Some of the sentences aren't even complete thoughts. 'The wind blowing in her hair.' It needs a 'was' if it's on its own. 'The wind WAS blowing in her hair.'
There are a few typos here and there, but nothing too serious. Paralized should be paralyzed, for instance.
Other than that, the story is pretty good on it's own and congratulations on the win!
The English could use some work and a lot of sentences have problems with the tenses, specifically with 'have', 'has', and 'had'. Some of the sentences aren't even complete thoughts. 'The wind blowing in her hair.' It needs a 'was' if it's on its own. 'The wind WAS blowing in her hair.'
There are a few typos here and there, but nothing too serious. Paralized should be paralyzed, for instance.
Other than that, the story is pretty good on it's own and congratulations on the win!
Good story, the only thing that bothers me is how Emi was dead for two years before she was given the reborn potion, other then that its a cute little story^^
Congrats! :)
Congrats! :)
Dicatae - You came here JUST to post that? You could have at least added a congrats to your post.
Congrats on the win! What a lovely story :)
Congrats on the win! What a lovely story :)
The name or the profile don't matter; what matters is the fact the story is wonderful and well written. Congratulations!
